Writing is a lonely endeavor. You start off with a nebulous idea that can blossom into something that interests you, the writer. For me, that is obviously keeping up with the dialysis game, which this blog is mostly about at least tangentially.
A colleague of mine is in the throes of writing his dissertation at Purdue and asked me about AI-specifics to aid and abet his journey which, as I can well attest, can be gruesome. While writing a blog is not on the same level, the same basics apply; communicate clearly and directly. I decided to use Poe to ascertain how we’re doing from a writing perspective in this blog. Below I’ve embedded the Prompt I used in Poe and what “she” had to say about this blog.
Prompt: I write a blog at url www.feeser.me that is about my dialysis journey. Please evaluate my writing and tell me how we’re doing
Henry Feeser’s Peritoneal Dialysis (PD) journey – Never ring the bell! (https://www.feeser.me/)
9:10 PM
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Poe
Your blog about your dialysis journey is engaging and personal, offering readers a candid look into your daily experiences and challenges. Here are some strengths and areas for improvement:
Strengths:
- Personal Touch: Your writing is relatable, sharing not just medical updates but also personal anecdotes about gardening and family life, which adds warmth.
- Consistency: You maintain a regular posting schedule, which keeps your audience engaged and informed about your journey.
- Humor and Positivity: Despite the challenges of dialysis, you have a positive tone, often infusing humor and lightheartedness, which can be uplifting for readers.
- Detailed Descriptions: You provide specific details about your activities, making it easy for readers to visualize your day-to-day life.
Areas for Improvement:
- Structure and Flow: Consider organizing your posts with clearer headings or sections to improve readability, especially for longer entries.
- Engagement with Readers: Encouraging more interaction through questions or prompts at the end of posts could foster a sense of community among your readers.
- Visuals: Adding images or videos related to your gardening or daily activities could enhance engagement and break up text.
- Medical Insights: While personal experiences are valuable, including more information about the dialysis process, tips, or resources could benefit readers who may be going through similar situations.
Overall, your blog is doing well in sharing your journey and connecting with readers. Keep up the good work!
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